성인 영어회화 자기소개 교정 (2)

번호	학생 원문	수정된 문장	수정 이유 및 문법 설명
1	The most impressive travel place is 'Da Nang'.	The most memorable trip for me was to Da Nang in Vietnam.	‘impressive travel place’는 어색한 표현 → memorable trip 사용. 'to Da Nang'으로 자연스럽게 방향 표현. ‘for me’로 강조.
2	It is my first 동남아 trip and my first trip with my friends.	It was my first trip to Southeast Asia and also my first trip with friends.	‘동남아’ → Southeast Asia. ‘is’ → ‘was’ (과거 이야기). 표현을 병렬로 자연스럽게 정리.
3	I liked all lodging during the travel.	We stayed at some really nice places. The hotels were clean and pretty.	‘lodging’은 어색함 → stay at nice places / hotels가 더 일반적. 초급자가 쓰기 쉬운 문장으로 분리.
4	I think most of lodging in 동남아 are pretty.	(위 문장과 통합됨)	‘I liked all lodging’과 의미가 겹치므로 제거하고 문장을 합쳐 더 자연스럽게 표현.
5	And 동남아 foods are very tasty! 쌀국수, 반미, 짜조... but 분짜기 was the best!	I especially loved the food in Vietnam. I tried pho, banh mi, and cha gio. But my favorite was bun cha.	‘동남아 foods’ → the food in Vietnam으로 구체화. 음식 이름은 로마자 표기로. 분짜기 → bun cha로 수정. 문장을 세 개로 나눠 가독성 향상.
6	I first ate '고수'.	I also tried cilantro for the first time.	‘고수’ → cilantro. ‘first ate’보다 tried for the first time이 더 자연스럽고 친숙함.
7	It tasted like bitter shampoo.	It tasted a little strange, like bitter shampoo.	원래 표현은 유머로 좋지만, a little strange 추가로 초급자 말투에 어울리게 완화.
8	There is a place I like.	I visited the old town in Hoi An.	구체적으로 표현하고 시제 일치. like보다는 visited로 경험 강조.
9	It's the old town in Hoi An.	It was beautiful and had a traditional feeling.	앞 문장과 연결되므로 별도 문장으로 확장. 외국인이 이해하기 쉬운 표현 추가.
10	I got on the 'wish boat'	I also rode a “wish boat” at night.	got on → rode가 자연스럽고 일반적인 표현. ‘at night’로 장면 구체화.
11	It was very cool and romantic.	It was cool and very romantic.	원래 문장이 자연스러워 순서만 조정. ‘wish boat’ 직후에 위치.
12	The best moment was Christmas party here!	The best moment was the Christmas party we had there.	here는 막연함 → we had there로 구체적이고 문법적으로 자연스럽게.
13	Christmas in midsummer was so romantic.	It was in the middle of summer, and it felt really special.	in the middle of summer는 자연스럽고 회화적인 표현. so romantic → felt really special로 완화.